Can you mark me A - B -C -D -F on my essay about the bread winner im only in Grade 7 so please mark nicely?

If I were your teacher I would most likely give you something in the range of a B. If you don't mind having a bit of help on your essay I think you should combine the following two sentences so the essay flows better. "That reminds me of how women are discriminated all over the world. That also reminds me of why we should not push towards peoples rights." Otherwise the essay is relatively good for someone that is in the 7th grade. Hope you get a good grade.